The smell of bread filled the tiny house, if it could even be called a house. The shudders had been thrown open to the world, the rose-gold rays of dawn letting the dust shimmer in the sky like fool’s gold as it cast its glow on the flour-covered wooden table of the kitchen-corner. The ‘men’ of the house, small men though they be, had already left to fulfill their duties for the day, leaving their sisters behind to bicker amongst themselves, out of earshot and out of mind.
A/N: Still on the lookout for feedback (And maybe a proofreader?) if anyone wishes to give it (Either through in-game mail or PMing here). Hope you enjoy reading this.
A/N: Hello! If you're reading this, I'm looking for feedback, critique and comments on storywriting, like pace, tone, enjoyment. I haven't written in a long time and it's been more than a year since I'd done something for LotRO RP, and decided to pen up a multi-part story on this character's current plotline, so that I can get back into the habit of writing and improve my storytelling skills.
Any feedback I get is very very appreciated! It would help me a lot towards getting back into the flow of things!
Alekay: "Wouldn't say love, but definitely tha' feelin' of attraction and care, somethin' precious."
[Pause] Alekay: "I am absolutely sorry if I jus' hit you with that like a ton o' bricks."
[Perlene blinks at him and laughs.] Perlene:"Oi' ye know I'm fond of ye, silly."
Alekay as the role of Winston Thornberry
Claery as the role of Clara Lake Steafan as the role of Steafan (Audience Member) Audience as the role of the Audience
Kayrin smiled at the emerging stars, although they told her, she had steered the ship too much toward the South. She turned the tiller calmly, correcting their course. An Eglan steering a ship at the open sea. How wonderfully strange, she thought.Ameren or Sugar Plume as she liked to call her, appeared to be sleeping on the deck, she glanced at her briefly, imagining what sort of a woman she was.